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Please correct my text - (write a text challenge - Text 3)

Herm1on3
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Hello everybody.

This is my third text in total and my second text in Swedish. This time I tried to use as many verbs as possible and so the content isn't really logical anymore - I apologize for that.

It would be so great if you could correct my text :) Thanks in advance.


Flickan leker med sin hund. En flicka älskar sin hund och sina syskon. Hon har två systrer och en bror. Sin lillasyster sitter i hus och ritar. Hunden springer och flickan följer efter honom. Flickans mor kommer. "Vad gör du?" frågar modern. "Jag leker med vår hund" svarar flickan. "Lyssna", säger modern. "Jag ringer din far och då vi går på restaurangen!" Mannen arbetar i restaurangen. Han är kock. Han köper kött och lagar mat. Kvinnan går. Dån flickan går i hus. Sin syster skriver ett brev. Sin andra syster sjunger. En pojke lever i hus. Han är flickans bror. Han talar tre språken. Han studerar i dag. Plötsligt, sin lillasyster gråter. Pojken vet att sin syster älskar att rita. Han tröstar flickan. "Jag vill simma" säger sin lillasyster. I trädgård, hunden hoppar. Syskonen resa sig och går i trädgård. De ser att hunden hittar en docka. "Det är min docka!" söger yngsta syster.

2 years ago

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https://www.duolingo.com/Zmrzlina
Zmrzlina
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This might seem a bit harsh, but I picked your text apart and corrected it. You're doing well, don't be too disheartened!


Flickan leker med sin hund. En flicka älskar sin hund och sina syskon.

You're referring to the same girl as earlier in your second sentence, so it should be "flickan".

Hon har två systrar och en bror. Hennes lillasyster sitter i hus och ritar. Hunden springer och flickan följer efter honom.

If you want to say "at home", you should say "sitter hemma och ritar". Also, you cannot use "sin" unless you're referring back to the girl within the same sentence.

Flickans mor kommer. "Vad gör du?" frågar modern. "Jag leker med vår hund" svarar flickan. "Lyssna", säger modern. "Jag ringer din far och då vi går på restaurangen!"

V2 rule, verb second: "då går vi på restaurang". Also, it sounds strange to speak about "restaurangen" (definite) without it being know what restaurant we're talking about.

Mannen arbetar i restaurangen.

You are " restaurang".

Han är kock. Han köper kött och lagar mat. Kvinnan går.

What woman? It's not really apparent who it's referring to.

Dån flickan går i hus.

I think you mean to say "goes home" here, which is "går hem". Also, V2 rule. The sentence should be "Då går flickan hem".

Sin syster skriver ett brev. Sin andra syster sjunger.

As said above, you cannot use "sin" without referring to a subject within the same sentence. It doesn't refer back in general to the subject of a text, just the same sentence. Both of them thus have to be "hennes"

En pojke lever i hus.

"Lever" means being alive. I think you mean "bor", which is about residing somewhere. Also, since you're referring to a certain aforementioned house, it ought to be "i huset".

Han är flickans bror. Han talar tre språken. Han studerar i dag.

Tre språk. Like almost all ett-words that end in a consonant, språk is the same in singular and plural indefinite.

Plötsligt, sin lillasyster gråter.

Swedish doesn't want a comma there, and "sin" isn't referring back to someone here. The sentence has to be "Plötsligt gråter flickans lillasyster" or "Plötsligt gråter hennes lillasyster".

Pojken vet att sin syster älskar att rita. Han tröstar flickan.

This one is tricky! The "att" introduces a new clause that makes "sin" not work. So it has to be "pojken vet att hans syster älskar att rita".

"Jag vill simma" säger sin lillasyster.

Sin isn't referring back to someone here.

I trädgård, hunden hoppar.

V2 rule and speaking about a specific garden: "I trädgården hoppar hunden".

Syskonen resa sig och går i trädgård.

You need present tense "reser" here, and definite "trädgården".

De ser att hunden hittar en docka. "Det är min docka!" söger yngsta syster.

"Säger" has an Ä, and the sister at the end is known, so it should be "yngsta systern".

2 years ago

https://www.duolingo.com/Ezkertia
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The quantity and quality of this feedback are hugely impressive. My hat's off to you, Zmrzlina.

2 years ago

https://www.duolingo.com/Zmrzlina
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:)

2 years ago

https://www.duolingo.com/Herm1on3
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Thank you so much. I guess duo hasn't taught me the v2 rule yet and I didn't know that I couldn't use sin if thr person it was referring to isn't in the same sentence. So thank you very very much for explaining it so explicitly. I've started doing swedish on the first of january so I'm not really advanced.

I'll give you lingots for your work

2 years ago

https://www.duolingo.com/Zmrzlina
Zmrzlina
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You'll learn as you go. If you started just a few weeks ago, you're already at an impressive level! Also, translating things is great practice as far as I am concerned. With time, patience and practice, I'm sure you'll do wonders!

2 years ago

https://www.duolingo.com/Herm1on3
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I have corrected my text for myself but I still have a question about the V2 rule.

I can say:

Hunden springer med flickan. (Here the verb is in second position)

But I have to say:

I trädgarden springer hunden.

Is it because "I trädgarden" is seen as one position and the second position is the verb then?

(I found the wikipedia article about this rule but it is just too complex for me yet)

2 years ago

https://www.duolingo.com/Zmrzlina
Zmrzlina
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Yes. V2 means the verb is in the second position in the sentence, but not necessarily the second word. If you start a sentence with a subclause, for example, the entire subclause counts as one unit, and the finite verb of the main clause will follow. Example:

[Eftersom jag är trött] [sover] [jag]

First, the subclause "because I am tired", then the main clause "I sleep" with the verb in second position of the sentence.

2 years ago

https://www.duolingo.com/SylviaK-D

I am so confused. I speak no Swedish whatsoever. I just want to say WOW.

2 years ago

https://www.duolingo.com/efisgpr
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Interesting, I'm following this! Good job. That was fun & a challenge to read for me.

2 years ago

https://www.duolingo.com/tjasonham
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Wow, this taught me a ton about "sin/sitt/sina"!

Also Herm1on3, these are awesome. Quite wonderful to see how much vocabulary can be used by the time you reach level 8 on Duolingo Swedish. And that you've only been doing this for 25 days, lol.

2 years ago

https://www.duolingo.com/Herm1on3
Herm1on3
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Thank you :)

It really helps me to write texts ... And I'm glad it helped you with sin/sit/sina. I think i've understood it now as well :)

I'll write a new text as soon as I have enough time.

2 years ago
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