Quelqu'un peut-il me corriger svp (in English)
Bonjour quelqu'un peut-il me dire si il n'y a pas de faute ?
Introduce document : This is a text extracted from First Goals and entitled « The Land Rover story ». It was published by Foucher in 2003. It is about the famous car : the Land Rover It can be divided into two parts. The first part talks about the conception of the Land Rover. The engineer Maurice Wilks, had an old jeep from the American army which was too old and unrepairable so he asked to his brother Spencer (the manager of Rover) to design a vehicle with Rover parts. Then Maurice invented a car inspired from his old Jeep. The second part talks about the Land Rover's appearance4 . So the first Land Rover appeared in April 1948, Maurice presented it as (comme) the farmer's ideal car. In 1949 the British army adopted it. To conclude, I would like to say...
<<>> should be " ". No space before colon. So basically, check your punctuation thoroughly. As = comme. Correct!
Introduction: This is a text extracted from First Goals and entitled The Land Rover Story. It was published by Foucher in 2003. It is about a famous car - the Land Rover. It can be divided into two parts. The first part talks about the conception of the Land Rover. The engineer Maurice Wilks had an old jeep from the American army which was too old and unrepairable so he asked his brother Spencer (the manager of Rover) to design a vehicle with Rover parts. Then Maurice invented a car inspired by his old Jeep. The second part talks about the Land Rover's appearance. The first Land Rover appeared in April 1948. Maurice presented it as the farmer's ideal car. In 1949 the British army adopted it. In conclusion, I would like to say...
Je vois aucun intérêt à ton commentaire. Qui est infondé, car si tu avais pris le temps de lire tu aurais pu comprendre que l'exercice (présentation d'un doc) c'est moi qu'il est fait et que je demande une correction des fautes SEULEMENT. Donc au lieu de prouver ton existence sur ce post trouve une autre occupation, merci.
Et je vois que tu as supprimé tous les commentaires ou tu as dit "il doit être parfait" encore et encore et encore. J'ai lu que tu as initialement posté, et tous les commentaires qui n'existent plus. Bonne chance avec ton professeur!
Thank you for your help...I have an other (and the last) request. Could you please have a look at this text please ? Thank youuuuuuu. It have to be perfect! : )
This is a text extracted from New action goals workbook, it was published by Foucher in 2012. It is about the history of Hollywood. It can be divided into two parts. The first part talks about hollywood's origins. This is in 1887, Harvey Wilcox bought a land in the west of Los Angeles and his wife Deida named this property « hollywood ».That was the name of a friend's summer property in Ohio. Harvey decided to divided it into lots, and drew a map of a future village.
The second part talks about its expansion as a famous place. Between 1900 and 1904 the Hollywood village began to become more important with more and more facilities. 6 years later , Hollywood became the land of movies.
To conclude I would like to say …..
Hollywood, New Action Goals workbook - capital letters for proper nouns.
"In 1887, Harvey Wilcox..."
"bought land" - no indefinite article OR "bought some land" OR "bought a plot of land"
"Six years later" - single-digit numbers should be written as words; numbers higher than 10 use figures.
And as others have said, «...» is not correct English pronunciation. Use "..."
Quand tu parles des parties tu dis: " The first part talks about" mais c'est faux. Il faudrait dire: "The first part deals with..." ou "The first part is about" mais tu ne peux pas dire elle parle comme si c'était un humain.
Ca depends. En cette case, il s'agit d'une histoire narrative du Land Rover. C'est possible qu'il a ete ecrit du point de vue d'une personne. C'est alors possible de dire "The first part talks about..." imo.
Re moi j'en ai encore un petit texte (c'est vraiment pour me relire car des fates d'inattention il y en a toujours) merciiii aux personnes qui ont pris un peu de leur temps pour me lire.
This document is a text from the British council entitled "My town". It is about Newquay which is Alex's town. It can be divided into three parts. The first part talks about the location and the description of Newquay. It is a small town in the south of England. There are great beaches, it is the best place to surf. The second part talks about the reasons why Alex loves Newquay . It's because there are lots activities to do. Like kayaking, water-skiing or coasteering. And the third part refers to others things that you can do in Newquay, like visit the Blue Reef Aquarium ,Newquay Zoo or other attractions like mini golf and bowling. To conclude I would like to say that "I love water-sport especially water-skiing"...
An other one : )...
"This document is a text extracted from First Goals and entitled Fiona's life . It was published by Foucher in 2003 . It is about Fiona's life ( about her work, her hobbies, her husband etc...) . It can be divided1 into two parts . The first part talks about her place of living and her work routine. She is a shop assistant of twenty-five years old for B&Q in Aberdeen. She works early and goes to work by bus. The second part talks about her husband and what they do together and it talks about her hobbies. Fiona is married to Jim, they don't have any children and they like going abroad during their holidays. And they go rock climbing when they have two days off. Fiona likes playing the piano , and during her spare time she likes painting. To conclude, I would like to say (je voudrais dire) …..... "