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https://www.duolingo.com/profile/alcg92

If someone can check my little written, I would thanks it very much.

If someone can check my written, I would thanks it very much. I want write a few all days in English. (If you want that I check your Spanish written, I can do it).

A day of winter, I was walking to my garden when I saw a bird. It seemed very ill, it was to lying down. But although it looked like bad, it sang a song very beautiful. I wanted to help it, but the song was so wonderful and though I wanted to move, I was like a stone, neither my hand not my foots don't answered me. So I started to think that the bird was help me and it didn’t need my help, because the song was so beautiful that it seemed that all my problems was a stupid things. However, a cat came to us, and I started to stress….

Thank you, very much friends!

June 23, 2017

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https://www.duolingo.com/profile/Allison2014...

Hola! Buen trabajo! Here are some suggestions to help you!

A day of winter, (Normally, we say A day in winter or a winter day)

I was walking to my garden when I saw a bird. (This sentence is great! Muy bien)

It seemed very ill, it was to lying down. (In this case, you would not need the "to")

But although it looked like bad, it sang a song very beautiful. ( Looks great!)

I wanted to help it, but the song was so wonderful and though I wanted to move, I was like a stone (This line was wonderfully put together!)

neither my hand not my foots don't answered me. (In this line change the "not" to a "nor" and take out the "don't")

So I started to think that the bird was help me and it didn’t need my help, ( For this line just add an -ing to the first help - so it says "the bird was helping me".)

because the song was so beautiful that it seemed that all my problems was a stupid things. ( For this line take out the that after beautiful and change the 2nd "was" to a were! )

However, a cat came to us, and I started to stress…. ( Haha muy divertido!)

Si quieres que revise tu escritura de nuevo! ¡Me encantaría!

-Ally


https://www.duolingo.com/profile/alcg92

thank you very much Alison! please, if you want, check my written when you want or can!! For me it's a very bieg help. (Me has ayudado mucho) :)


https://www.duolingo.com/profile/swingbeatnik7

It was a winter day and I was walking [to/through] my garden when I saw a bird. It seemed very ill [and/because] it was lying down. Although it looked bad, it sang a very beautiful song. I wanted to help it, but the song was so wonderful that though I wanted to move, I was like a stone, neither my hands nor my feet answered me. So I started to think that the bird was helping me and it didn’t need my help, because the song was so beautiful that it seemed that all my problems [were/are] stupid things. However, a cat came to us, and I started to stress…. P.s. I just wanted to say I really liked your story it's stuff like this that makes me happy here on DuoLingo.


https://www.duolingo.com/profile/alcg92

Thank you swingbeatnik7, people generous wiht his time like you makes me happy here on Duolingo. Thank you


https://www.duolingo.com/profile/Nataliabgm

A day of winter, I was walking [in] my garden when I saw a bird. It seemed very ill, it was - lying down. But although it looked - bad, it sang a very beautiful song. I wanted to help it, but the song was so wonderful and though I wanted to move, I was like a stone, neither my hands [nor] my feet -answered me. So I started to think that the bird was helping me and it didn’t need my help, because the song was so beautiful that it seemed that all my problems were - stupid things. However, a cat came to us, and I started to be stressed….


https://www.duolingo.com/profile/alcg92

Thank you, very much Nataliabgm, me ha ayudado mucho!!


https://www.duolingo.com/profile/BelgianStr

I put a few minor corrections in brackets.

A day of winter, I was walking to my garden when I saw a bird. It seemed very ill, it was [] lying down. But although it looked [] bad, it sang a [very beautiful song]. I wanted to help it, but the song was so wonderful and though I wanted to move, I was like a stone, neither my hand[s] no[r] my [feet] [would] answer[] me. So I started to think that the bird was help[ing] me and it didn’t need my help, because the song was so beautiful that it seemed that all my problems [were] stupid things. However, a cat came to us, and I started to stress….


https://www.duolingo.com/profile/alcg92

Thank you BelgianStr, than you very much

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