Paranormal experience or abnormal cerebral functioning? (writing practice)
Last night something very unusual happened to me. After some reflection, and until proved otherwise, I would define it as a "vivid nightmare". But at that very moment, around 3.00 a.m., my brain didn't seem to function normally. I'll describe my experience as accurate(?) as I can.
The event must have begun before 2.00. The first awakening was kind of tough. I recall having a "kind-of-usual vivid dream", where I can sense myself sleeping. I mean, my body, but I cannot move. I can think, and kind of see my room, my own body on my bed, but cannot move. If I try hard enough, I can barely move, dully and slowly enough to feel upset about it. And then woke up, tired and on a "what-the-heck" state. Looked for the time on my cellphone. ~2.19
The second awakening was madness, and the reason I woke up screaming as have not I, since I was a child (kind of 15 years ago). Around 2.40 a.m. I must have managed to fell sleep again. Bad move. The next thing I recall was having a "unusual vivid dream". I have at least four of these a year. These are very short dreams, in which I suspect I am dreaming and I feel funny(weird). I found myself in different places, sometimes doing normal stuff, but others unnatural things. This time I recall being at home. It was dark, and for some reason I was at the backyard of my house. I was sitting on the floor, with a little lion pet (yes, part of the dream), and my dog (the real one), and the little lion was trying to play with my dog, I thought "no way", I tried to stop them. And then the nightmare begun.
The lion heard something on the front of my house, and immediately ran towards it. My dog disappeared (literally, it was a dream). In a matter of seconds the following happened. I thought, "what now?!" (I was having fun with the little lion). and then stood up an appeared inside my house. I could hear the lion roaring painfully, and tried to look for him through the window, I couldn't find it. And simultaneosly violent bangings on my front door begun to make the "reallity" go to the first kind of dream I described. I-could-not-move. I felt madness. My body, against my will, was slowly, heading to the front door, where still violent bangings sounded. I could think, that was the worst part, I was aware of the situation. I thought, "What's this?, the lion is gone, and now me?. It cannot not be. It cannot be". I was trying to deny the "obvious"(at that moment); I was being abducted by some force----------I tried as hard as I could to make my body obey me again. I couldn't, but finally managed to scream my lungs out, and then woke up. ~3.46 and wait for the morning.
(Sorry if it was kind of long/deep writing, I would appreciate any comments, corrections)
- as accurately as I can (yes, sometimes we get careless and use adjectives as adverbs, but it doesn't seem too common for "accurate," and it's not accepted even when common)
- where I could sense myself sleeping; the "narrative present" doesn't seem to go well with "I recall having"
- in a "what-the-heck" state
- as I haven't since I was a child (about 15 years ago)
- an "unusual
- pet lion (instead of "lion pet")
- nightmare began
- in/at the front of my house
- happened: (colon, not period)
- funny to switch from "him" to "it" so quickly for the lion
Have you tried HiNative? I think it specializes in this sort of composition-correcting exercise.
I disagree with you on the accurately part. Accurately acts on the verb describe... to describe accurately. You noticed that it is an adverb, which means it should have the (-ly) ending. Accurate could work as an adjective if the noun description was used, but then we would have to add a verb to the sentence to make it work.
I like the sentence: I'll describe my experience as accurately as I can.
Right, but that uses the adverb "accurately" as, well, an adverb. I'm recommending the same form you are.
The question is about "describe my experience as accurate as I can," which, yes, one could probably find native English speakers somewhere saying, but it's not standard English, so not a good example for those learning the language.
Oh, then we agree.
Sadly, dropping the (-ly) ending from adverbs is such a common error. You might even sound MORE native by doing it.
Right? right?...What a funny paradox...It happens also in spanish, you sound more like a native if you don't speak the language properly. Thank you for reading, as well.
Hello. Thank you very much for reading and pointing out those details. It means a lot to me. I know you don't need lingots, but I'll give you ten anyway, as a symbol of gratitude.
I didn't know about HiNative. I will certainly check that out. Thanks again.
This is good writing in English Sergio!
piguy3 got all the little errors I think.
Thank you. As someone said:
The devil is in the details.
I still have to improve some details. So I have to risk myself to fail sometimes. It's great I don't have too many errors, though.
Well I will try to share my opinion. "my brain didn't seem to function normally. I'll describe my experience as accurate(?) as I can."
Mmm I think while we are dreaming, remember the brain passes to "alfa signal" well I am not wrong in dreams the brain pass trhough 5 stages... And maybe we are not familiar with those states, so maybe your brain is working as expected but you cannot corroborate it.
" where I can sense myself sleeping. I mean, my body, but I cannot move." Some people call to this : ammm "astral travel" xD hehe I experienced this once, however for me it wasn't a nightmare, it was a wonderful experience. However sometimes I cannot scream or move, similar as you, when those events happen I feel so bad, fortunately it happens rarely.
" I was being abducted by some force" interesting, regarding my "astral travel" a light tried to abducted me.
Well buddy, dreams, nightmares are interesting some people think that mmm objects are so important and they write their dreams in order to discover the "meaning". For example I can dream about a lion but maybe for me it is not important, but maybe for you has some meaning. Maybe your "alter ego" is trying to tell you something.
Well nice topic friend!!!
Thanks for sharing, bro.
I called abnormal, because of two reasons; 1) The "nightmare" was completely out of the blue. You know, one generally have nightmares after a day/or days in which something disturbed us (maybe a movie, a strange event or thing). But this was not the case at all, I had a completely normal week, nothing scary-related. And 2) After having this kind of vivid dreams/nightmares, when I wake up, I manage to put myself together and sleep, but this time I was kind of in trance, unable to rationalize what had happened. Really weird. Anyway, last night slept like a baby. I hope this won't happen again.
Oh thanks for the explanation, sometimes it happens, mmmm I remember about one dream where a girl and me were dancing in a hall in a party, but in the XV's century... The only context or connection was the girl: "I loved her" hehehe BTW I wrote a topic about love xD LOL. But the situation was completely out of my reality.
If you still remember that, it must have been a wonderful dream. Well, not the dream itself, but the sentiment. Glad for you.
Mmm in the dream was awesome... but... She knew that it was only a dream and she told me (in spanish): "you have to wake up" and I did not want to.
So after the dream I just cried xD
Dude, I shouldn't tell you. But I will. I had kind of a similar experience years ago.
She and I were on bed. We're not doing nothing. Just lied on there. I could feel her near me, and see our feet. It felt better than anything, just knowing I was there laying with her. Not need to anything else. I understand you, it was also so damn beautiful, that waking up and knowing it was not real, tore me apart. I get you.