Hi, would you give "some feedback" to me?
I wrote a little text in my native language first, and then I tried to write it again in English. I'd like to know if this makes sense and if I have made some mistakes (or not). I feel that my English has gotten better since the last time I tried to write something in another language, so I'm pretty confident that I've improved since then
THE LITTLE TEXT <
"Home is not a place, a house, or the things we own. Home is in the people we love and the things we believe in. Where we feel good, that's our home."
There is a few grammar errors, and honestly, even native speakers make some quite often. For example, the "is" in the sentence I just wrote should be an "are", and that is a common English mistake.
You'll want a comma after "house". List are separated by commas when there is more than two items in it. The colon, after good, should be a comma. A colon is used after a complete sentence. That isn't one, since it has a "where." Honestly, I had to google everything to make sure.
It is very well written! In only a few sentences, you capture a very strong sentiment. The reader knows exactly what your talking about. :)
First of all, your English is excellent. Clear and understandable. The text is lovely! I might choose to say “Home is the people we love...” rather than “Home is in the people we love,” as home is an abstract concept and not a physical place. To me this is more fluid. However, I would note that this is an editorial decision (style) and not a grammar mistake.
As for the lead-in paragraph, it has a few grammatical errors, which I have corrected below. I would note these errors do not affect its legibility, but they do flag the writing as from a non-native speaker:
“Would you give feedback (or “some feedback”) to me?
I wrote a little text in my native language first, and then I tried to write it again in English. I'd like to know if this makes sense and if I have made some mistakes (or not). I feel that my English has gotten better since the last time I tried to write something in another language, so I'm pretty confident that I've improved since then.”
Yes, I got the "uncountable" part by the "some", after your review. Thanks, again.
Tenses, tenses, tenses... We always need to develop them, right? I know I have some difficult with tenses, that's why I'll focus on that in 2018.
I also know that it takes many years to be totally fluent at any language. And then, I see myself in the next years so much better at English. I'm not gonna give up.