https://www.duolingo.com/profile/RebeccaWil435508

Is this correct?

De plus, les médias qui sont partagés sur Internet peuvent nuire à l'estime de soi. Les plus vulnérables sont les jeunes qui tentent d'imiter des célébrités comme Kim Kardashian et Jeanne Damas. L'Internet est plein d'images irréalistes sur l'apparence physique, qui peuvent causer des problèmes de santé mentale et des maladies telles que l'anorexie.

Could someone please tell me whether this passage is correct, please? Thanks a lot :)

April 9, 2018

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https://www.duolingo.com/profile/Sitesurf

You don't need "l'" before Internet.

It is considered as a registered trade mark when it is used as a noun, and it is not capitalized when it is used as an adjective.

  • ... partagés sur Internet...
  • Internet est plein d'images...
  • J'ai un accès internet.
April 9, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/RebeccaWil435508

Thank you for your help. Is that the only mistake?

April 9, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/Sitesurf

One typo: vulnérables

Punctuation: no comma between "jeunes qui", but one between"physique, qui"

April 9, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/RebeccaWil435508

Thank you :)

April 9, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/ngraner42

Here is how I read it:

Increasingly the media shared on the Internet can harm people's self estime. The most vulnerable are the youth who tend to imitate celebreties like Kim Kardashian and Jeanne Damas. The internet is full of unrealistic images of physical appearance which can casue mental health problems and sickneses such as anorexia.

April 9, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/RebeccaWil435508

Yeah, that's what I want to say but I used the 'de plus' to say 'furthermore' rather than as 'de plus en plus'. Thank for your help. Are there any mistakes?

April 9, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/BUTTERFLY1243

It is

April 9, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/RebeccaWil435508

Thank you :)

April 9, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/Mayonesa150

Ce texte est très bien écrit, félicitations!

April 11, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/RebeccaWil435508

Merci beaucoup :)

April 14, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/BUTTERFLY1243

derien

April 15, 2018
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