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I am a beginner in English, and I tried to write a poem :D
Billions of people lying in bed under the moonlight
No shortage of me, no shortage of anyone
Everyone is talking about their own dreams
Fantasy words, Recalling words
Silent words, Sad words
How many silent souls
How many thoughts, how much snow in the air
They exist, and I don’t know any other thing about it.
We are all mysterious creatures under the moonlight
Small and great surviving
Breathing, thinking
Silent lone star
Everything will come and go
But there is a thought that will last forever
It is cherishment
I don't know where is wrong, maybe it will be weird. just try，because I love poem ! If you reply, I will speak Chinese. have a good day :)
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Fantastic !
That's a million times better than this piece of rubbish that I wrote
Many a beautiful dog
On an Internet blog
"many a... " is an archaic/poetic way to say "many..." so this just means "many beautiful dogs"
thank you very much !!
but why is dog? why isn't cat or other thing? where is the dog? (⊙ˍ⊙) dog?? what????
A great effort, especially as a beginner learner. I've seen native speakers do worse.(no offense to anyone) Keep it up !! :)
only thing i saw was "anyone" is miss spelled in the second line. other than that though its awesome!!!
这是漂亮！
(But “it is cherish” is not grammatically correct. Maybe it should be “it is cherished”?)
thank for your advice !
But “这是漂亮” also is not grammatically correct, you can say "这是一首漂亮的诗" or "漂亮！", because “这是” 后面不能以【形容词】作结尾 :)
漂亮 is 形容词
yes !
here the moonlight on the snow and and on the fjord... no words to explain.
No need to reply. It’s “I don’t know what is wrong....” And no storage? Maybe you’re trying to say no place for me, no place for anyone. Or space?
i am a native english speaker and i can't write a poem to save my self, good job
From a native English speaker... I genuinely love this. It made me think. Thank you.
I like that it appears slightly translated from another language, it adds to the mystique of the poem. Great job!
我不明白"Fantasy words and recalling words". I am only fluent in English but I am learning Mandarin.
它很漂亮，我喜欢你的诗。
你这首诗真了不起。你要多写！"Cherishment" 有点独特性，我发觉是唯一例外的语法点，可是并不会说不对。You must be a poet in Chinese, too! I'd like to see more of what you've written -- in Chinese, English or whatever other language you are learning! Maybe we can only connect on Duolingo, for now, but I'm interested.
I’m a native speaker of English (America) and I think this poem looks great. Keep up the good work! (You did a good job!)
