https://www.duolingo.com/profile/A-Self

I am a beginner in English, and I tried to write a poem :D

Billions of people lying in bed under the moonlight

No shortage of me, no shortage of anyone

Everyone is talking about their own dreams

Fantasy words, Recalling words

Silent words, Sad words

How many silent souls

How many thoughts, how much snow in the air

They exist, and I don’t know any other thing about it.

We are all mysterious creatures under the moonlight

Small and great surviving

Breathing, thinking

Silent lone star

Everything will come and go

But there is a thought that will last forever

It is cherishment

I don't know where is wrong, maybe it will be weird. just try,because I love poem ! If you reply, I will speak Chinese. have a good day :)

November 23, 2018

57 Comments


https://www.duolingo.com/profile/PannasOwen

Fantastic !

That's a million times better than this piece of rubbish that I wrote

Many a beautiful dog

On an Internet blog

November 23, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/A-Self

谢谢,but……excuse me, what is "Many a beautiful dog" (´•灬•`)?? 什么是 “好多美丽的狗”??

November 23, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/colornbian

"many a... " is an archaic/poetic way to say "many..." so this just means "many beautiful dogs"

November 23, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/A-Self

thank you very much !!

but why is dog? why isn't cat or other thing? where is the dog? (⊙ˍ⊙) dog?? what????

November 24, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/Victoria_Herbert

Dog rhymes with blog. By making a poem rhyme is more poetic.

November 24, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/A-Self

原来如此 :)

November 25, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/Ike012

Because it rhymes with blog.

June 7, 2019

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/Ike012

It means many dogs. (Maybe translates to 多狗,not sure)

June 7, 2019

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/Bluebubble2018

A great effort, especially as a beginner learner. I've seen native speakers do worse.(no offense to anyone) Keep it up !! :)

November 25, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/A-Self

thank you my friend (*゚▽゚)ノ

November 25, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/LastSeong

only thing i saw was "anyone" is miss spelled in the second line. other than that though its awesome!!!

November 24, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/A-Self

谢谢你的建议 thanks !

November 24, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/miss_angel22

nice!!!

November 24, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/yotam180

干得好!

November 23, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/A-Self

谢谢!

November 24, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/missaenight

我喜歡寫詩。 雖然他們有點沮喪。 如果你想看到它,請告訴我。

November 23, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/A-Self

是的,我明确地告诉你,我想看看!

yes I want !

November 24, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/LittlemissLia

这是漂亮!

(But “it is cherish” is not grammatically correct. Maybe it should be “it is cherished”?)

November 23, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/A-Self

thank for your advice !

But “这是漂亮” also is not grammatically correct, you can say "这是一首漂亮的诗" or "漂亮!", because “这是” 后面不能以【形容词】作结尾 :)

漂亮 is 形容词

November 24, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/A-Self

而且 “漂亮” 主要形容 视觉方面

这里使用 “美” 更合适

November 24, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/LittlemissLia

谢谢你!对不起,我的中文不好 :’D But I will try my best to get better!

November 24, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/A-Self

Never mind!我的英语也不好!一起加油!

November 24, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/Wingtaylor

good job!!!!!!!

November 24, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/A-Self

thank you !

November 24, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/ParkJimin307567

Wow! Thats really good@

November 24, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/MinYoongi_1209

very good mate!

November 24, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/djeatonlisbon

Beautiful!

November 24, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/AmirZadah

Keep it up dude or girl IDK ^^ Anyway it's nice!

November 24, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/A-Self

thank you :)

November 25, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/vagnario

ok. cool you like poem. have a good day for you too.

November 24, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/250000000

Its good but I don't see the rhyme .

November 24, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/A-Self

very thank your advice! I will pay attention to

November 25, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/BafouillCharabia

yes !

here the moonlight on the snow and and on the fjord... no words to explain.

November 25, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/Ed.Guimaraes

Loved the poem :)

November 25, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/Holly251410

No need to reply. It’s “I don’t know what is wrong....” And no storage? Maybe you’re trying to say no place for me, no place for anyone. Or space?

November 25, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/Holly251410

Nice poem

November 25, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/Jli-wu

很好读啊!!你的英语很棒!

November 25, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/A-Self

谢谢 :)

November 26, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/JoshMelans1

Amazing!

November 26, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/Matt_hematics

Oh, great poem

November 26, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/ev.swan

i am a native english speaker and i can't write a poem to save my self, good job

November 26, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/A-Self

谢谢你!

November 26, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/Melisande28

From a native English speaker... I genuinely love this. It made me think. Thank you.

November 27, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/DesertRose353

Well done!

November 27, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/PeytonWebb7

you did great!

November 27, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/aandronic

Good job

November 27, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/Rachel549478

I like that it appears slightly translated from another language, it adds to the mystique of the poem. Great job!

November 29, 2018

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/ComfortSolace

^-^

这是非常可爱 ! 我爱 ! <3

May 19, 2019

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/Katie.LM2

I like this

June 5, 2019

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/Ike012

我不明白"Fantasy words and recalling words". I am only fluent in English but I am learning Mandarin.

它很漂亮,我喜欢你的诗。

June 7, 2019
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