https://www.duolingo.com/profile/LearnWithKitty

I Started a Japanese Journal! Will You Critique It?

As a practice exercise, I've decided to start writing short journal entries on my blog, in Japanese! Will you please take a look at my first entry and let me know what I can work on? I wrote about a couple Japanese shops I visited yesterday, and I posted pictures of the goodies I bought. I know the text is probably pretty messy, and I'm sure I write like a child... but that's part of the learning experience, right? :)

Also, I tried to only use kanji that I already know, so my apologies if it's a little kana-heavy in some spots.

Anyway, here's the link:

https://learnwithkitty.blogspot.com/2019/06/kittys-journal-shopping-adventure.html

Thank you so much!

Kitty

June 24, 2019

13 Comments


https://www.duolingo.com/profile/ParadoxN

It's pretty good :) There are a few mistakes though. You wrote 「楽しいでした」but since 楽しい is an い adjective, you have to write 楽しかったです for past tense. You did this correctly when you wrote 「食べたかった」but here you forgot the です at the end to make it a polite sentence. You want to be consistent since you were polite the rest of the post. You wrote 「二つみせ」, but when you write a counter before the noun, you have to put の between them, 二つのみせ。You wrote 「中で、甘いまめがあります」。 Here, though, you would use 中に, I believe. 中で is for when actions are being done somewhere. 中に is used to indicate where an object is when using あります。

Other than that, everything is パーフェクト!In some cases, there are more fitting grammar you could use, but it's likely you don't know them yet. So, here: I recommend learning つもりです, or to-plan-to, form. It will be useful for your blog!

Nice blog look btw. Very stylish.

June 24, 2019

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/LearnWithKitty

Thank you so much for taking the time to look at my journal! I really appreciate your detailed response. I knew there were mistakes, but I needed a little help picking them all out. The to-plan-to form sounds interesting! I'll look up everything you mentioned, and maybe even write a post with my study notes. :)

June 24, 2019

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/LearnWithKitty

Say, ParadoxN, would it be all right if I include your comment in my blog post? I'd like to keep it for my own reference and share it with my readers. :)

June 25, 2019

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/ParadoxN

Sure

June 25, 2019

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/DKP629394

First you bought Konpeito... こんぺいとうを買いました。

After that, you should use も instead of を for the things you also bought...

こしあんぱん も  買いました! [I separated it to make it look obvious - forgot how to do bold.]

June 26, 2019

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/BJCUAl

bold (two asterisks before and after word)

June 27, 2019

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/LearnWithKitty

That’s awesome! Thank you for pointing that out. I’ll jot it down.

June 26, 2019

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/RyotOrmes90

I can't critique your journal because you're better than I am at Japanese hehe.

What I can say though is I enjoyed browsing your blog; it's very well put together, and the Hamtaro/hamster theme you have going on is fun and adorable.

実は、たくさん習いました。

Your guide to sentence particles is very helpful and I could actually read your shopping trip journal in its entirety; pretty rewarding feeling actually!

たいへん よくできました。この調子で頑張れ!

June 26, 2019

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/LearnWithKitty

Hi, RyotOrmes90! ありがとうございます! I’m glad you enjoyed my blog. It’s become such a great learning tool for me personally, and it feels nice to be able to share what I’m learning. That’s so cool you could read my whole journal entry! すごい! Also, you must know more kanji than I do because I had to look up several of the words you used! :P

June 26, 2019

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/octparmon

Hi. I read your entry. I really enjoyed it. It's evident that a lot of effort and passion has gone into it. My Japanese is probably at a similar level than yours so I won't be able to help proofreading it. But you can bet I'll go back someday to see if you've placed any new entry. Congratulations!

June 27, 2019

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/LearnWithKitty

Thank you so much! I'll definitely write more in the future.

June 28, 2019

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/faint.

hey! quick question, did you learn all of this from duolingo?

July 16, 2019

https://www.duolingo.com/profile/LearnWithKitty

Great question! No, not all of it. I like to do extra research to supplement what I learn in Duolingo. I guess I tailor my studies to fit my own needs that way. In fact, one of my favorite ways to learn is to simply ask “I wonder how you say ___?” and then go looking for the answer.

July 16, 2019
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