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Escrevi o texto abaixo para treinar o meu vocabulário em Inglês. O texto ficou correto?

This is a letter from a man who is worried about what´s going on in the world.

I am thirty eight years old at the moment. Have a good wife, a good job, a good house and I believe in God. No, I don´t have children yet. Am I supposed to have? I don´t know.

I like to read news on tv, on the internet. Like to keep myself informed about issues such as sports, politics, economy and the situation of others countries. The problem is that what I´m reading is not so good.

People are still hurting each other. What´s the purpose of the Islamic State? Kills their brothers and sisters? We all are sons of the same God. No matter if you are a Christian, a Muslim, a Jewish, a Buddhist or an atheist. We all live on Earth.

I also have seen tensions between USA and Russian in Ukraine. Is the dreaded cold war back? Can this crisis be solved diplomatically? I realize that there is no need to fire no more shoots if our great leaders want.

And what about the eternal conflict between Israel and Palestine? Will they live in peace someday? Shall they live so close?

And here in Brazil, things are getting worse. Everybody knows someone who has died victim of our everyday violence. Our economy rates decreases as our inflation increases. The Government and major people are corrupted. Petrobrás, our main enterprise is almost broken, victim of this corruption. Everything is getting more expensive such as gasoline, food, energy. To make matters worse, in some regions, we are going through a long period of drought. Our public services are not doing well, as ever. People can´t take it anymore. Protests are happening everywhere.

But, despite it all, in the weekends, when I met my family, when I met my little nieces and nephews and I see a sweet smile and a beautiful innocence in their faces, I look at the sky and thank God for being where. And in a very particular way I whisper in His ear: “_ My little child is coming. Please bless him and do what You have to do.”

3 anos atrás

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https://www.duolingo.com/thaygomezz

Bom, eu ainda não sou expert em inglês. Esses foram os erros que encontrei, mas posso ter errado na correção e sejam livres para me avisar se eu cometer algum equivoco. :)

Na frase "Have a good wife, a good job, a good house and I believe in God.", você deveria colocar o I antes da palavra Have, porque como não há conjugação igual ao português, é necessário o pronome para que o leitor entenda de quem você esta falando. O mesmo ocorre na frase "Like to keep myself informed about..." (Deve colocar o pronome I antes do Like)

Também acho que o último paragrafo está um pouco confuso porque você inicia usando verbos no passado (met) e do nada coloca verbos no presente (see, look). Acho que tem algo errado aí kk

Creio que seja isso. Aliás, ótimo texto :D

3 anos atrás

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Good point - I think in Portuguese you have 'tenho, tens, temos' etc. In English we have 'I have, you have, we have', to us, yours looks like one word and to you, ours looks like two, but you still need to be clear who you are talking about, in any case. Otherwise it is unclear, you could be starting the sentence with 'you have a good wife' or 'they have a good wife' or 'we have a good wife' for all I know. Yeah, sharing is caring and all but... that's weird...

Don't get me wrong though, your English is still very good. At this stage, we are just nitpicking :)

3 anos atrás

https://www.duolingo.com/luismarcio1

Muito obrigado pelo elogio.

3 anos atrás

https://www.duolingo.com/luismarcio1

Obrigado, ótimas colocações. Concordo com vc.

3 anos atrás

https://www.duolingo.com/LilianSalvador

Concordo com as correções de "thaygomezz" e apenas uma outra parte que acredito que ficou um pouco confusa foi no terceiro parágrafo onde diz: "I like to read news on tv, on the internet", porque você inicia a sentença com o verbo "read" que remete "a ler notícias na internet" que vem posteriormente. Eu acredito que a frase ficaria melhor assim: "I like to watch news on tv and read on the internet", já que assistimos notícias na tv e lemos na internet. Caso eu tenha me equivocado, fique a vontade para correções, já que estamos aqui para aprender. Finalizando, o texto ficou ótimo e eu adorei lê-lo.

3 anos atrás

https://www.duolingo.com/luismarcio1

ok, obrigado.

3 anos atrás

https://www.duolingo.com/MatheusLem5

A frase "kills their brothers and sisters?" acho que está errada não seria Kill? Há outras coisas que eu encontrei por exemplo: We are sons of the same god. No matter if... you're an atheist

Talvez ficou um pouco confuso eu sugeriria reescrever o trecho. Algo como No matter if you are a Christian, a Muslim, a Jewish, a Buddhist and even if yor are an atheist we should live in harmony

algo do tipo mas talvez eu esteja sendo chato demais. No trecho: "I realize that there is no need to fire no more shoots if our great leaders want."

Acho que esse "no" após to fire está sobrando

No mais acho que está tudo ok parabéns pelo texto.

Gostaria que alguém checasse minhas observações pois não tenho pleno domínio da língua inglesa.

3 anos atrás

https://www.duolingo.com/luismarcio1

ok, obrigado

3 anos atrás

https://www.duolingo.com/ryunarukami

No último parágrafo, na frase "...I look at the sky and thank God for being where...", no lugar do "where" você utiliza o "there" para dar o sentido de "estar ali/lá". O where é utilizado como pronome interrogativo (Onde você está? / Where are you?) ou como como advérbio relativo (Ele está onde deveria estar/ He is where he should be). Mas o texto está excelente. Parabéns.

3 anos atrás

https://www.duolingo.com/luismarcio1

Neste caso foi um erro mesmo. Eu queria ter escrito here....

3 anos atrás

https://www.duolingo.com/Paulo_Leme

seu texto está muito bom, parabens. So espero que voce consiga se expressar assim verbalmente

3 anos atrás

https://www.duolingo.com/luismarcio1

obrigado

3 anos atrás

https://www.duolingo.com/Paulo_Leme

Your text is very good, congratulations!.I just hope you can express yourself well verbally

3 anos atrás

https://www.duolingo.com/luismarcio1

Novo texto com as correções:

This is a letter from a man who is worried about what´s going on in the world.

I am thirty eight years old at the moment. I have a good wife, a good job, a good house and I believe in God. No, I don´t have children yet. Am I supposed to have? I don´t know.

I like to watch news on tv and read on the internet. I like to keep myself informed about issues such as sports, politics, economy and the situation of others countries. The problem is that what I´m reading is not so good.

People are still hurting each other. What´s the purpose of the Islamic State? Kills their brothers and sisters? We all are sons of the same God. No matter if you are a Christian, a Muslim, a Jewish, a Buddhist or an atheist. We all live on Earth.

I also have seen tensions between USA and Russian in Ukraine. Is the dreaded cold war back? Can this crisis be solved diplomatically? I realize that there is no need to fire more shoots if our great leaders want.

And what about the eternal conflict between Israel and Palestine? Will they live in peace someday? Shall they live so close?

And here in Brazil, things are getting worse. Everybody knows someone who has died victim of our everyday violence. Our economy rates decreases as our inflation increases. The Government and major people are corrupted. Petrobrás, our main enterprise is almost broken, victim of this corruption. Everything is getting more expensive such as gasoline, food, energy. To make matters worse, in some regions, we are going through a long period of drought. Our public services are not doing well, as ever. People can´t take it anymore. Protests are happening everywhere.

But, despite it all, in the weekends, when I meet my family, my parents, when I meet my little nieces and nephews and I see a sweet smile and a beautiful innocence in their faces, I look at the sky and thank God for being here. And in a very particular way I whisper in His ear: “_ My little child is coming. Please bless him and do what You have to do.”

3 anos atrás